Black Ghost

This was very short, but there is still room to improve plot-wise: She remembered how she had gone to sleep, how she had been awoken some time later by screams, ...

8/10 that's the best kind!

One point: "Why do you cause so much trouble?" she asked, slightly grinning in the dim light at Evie's resistance to Sam. Every other child had gone to sleep and ...

I'd have to say change up the way you present it visually, because at first glance it's a bit confusing. Innocence in Bliss

Well basically, my dilemma comes from the plot. I can't decide what would be more exciting/relevant to the reader: the events as they unfold before Molly? Or as they happen ...

VIEWPOINTS ARE ANNOYING: Alright, The Oil Mark is getting on my nerves as far as viewpoints go. It's in third person, yes, but I can't seem to decide who to ...

I'm pretty sure that's a popsicle. And I think the quote is from Kingdom Hearts II, though I'm not sure. Nice pic. though! -Tony

Seriously, I was freaking out. Thank goodness everything is back to normal.

Very cool. Slightly ambiguous, but in a good way. There weren't any typos that I could spot, so congrats on the technical part. As for the plot, it was interesting, ...

Thanks for the encouragment, Kitty15. I've also done some thinking and figure it's okay to have more than one writing project at play, so I went ahead and added all ...

Yes, the next color after red should definitely be black. It shows intense power....

Technically, there were a lot of grammar issues and capitalization problems, so I suggest you read over this again and make sure to fix them. As for the story itself, ...

A Shadow moved up the wall. Now, is it a shadow, or the Shadow. Meaning, is it a specific entity (one of a kind), or is a general shadow. If ...

Thanks so much for the critiques, guys! I'm definately going to rewrite this in the future, and possibly change the ending, so I'll be sure to keep in mind what ...

"Just kidding! If you want to know the real ending, you'll have to buy the overpriced deluxe version of my novel "To Live A Life As A Male Prostitute With ...